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Review for Chapter 6 from Silens Cursor on July 20, 2009 at 10:21:11 PM
Hmm, a very interesting take on Harry, one I haven't seen before. Your Ravenclaw!Harry seems well-written, and your plot seems to be heading in a direction I haven't seen before.

That being said, I'm not sure about how you're going to do Padma properly, but I sincerely hope you elaborate more.

The plot remains something that I have not seen before, although I'm genuinely curious where you're going to go with it. I'm going to say that I'm usually not a fan of first-year stories, but your clean, interesting writing style has made for some interesting reading. Hope you'll have more to show us soon.
Review for Chapter 5 from Voice of the Nephilim on July 14, 2009 at 07:51:42 PM
That's a rather transparent ploy by Voldemort.

I found myself skimming this chapter, just didn't really hold me interest very much. Granted, Weasley's broom antics were kinda amusing.
Review for Chapter 4 from Voice of the Nephilim on July 14, 2009 at 07:46:44 PM
So, the Stone didn't do a great deal. That's somewhat disappointing.

Not much substance to the chapter. The ending seemed rather awkwardly written.
Review for Chapter 3 from Voice of the Nephilim on July 14, 2009 at 07:40:00 PM
Your formatting is very broken. Some paragraphs have three spaces, some scene transitions have no spaces after them.

Shouldn't Harry be receiving a letter breaking the Reasonable Use of Underage Magic decree?

Harry didn't go far enough with his threats. He started to, but backed off quickly. He could have had the Dursleys trembling, could have guaranteed fear from them, if not respects, and settled for a deserted room. With Vernon's fear of magic, I would think he would agree to Harry's demands rather quickly.

Makes sense that he wouldn't turn away Malfoy without Ron's presence.

Harry stays silent and the hat says Ravenclaw? I'm not seeing the logic here. The hat can clearly see into Harry's mind, and he's going to be unable to at least "think" a reply to the hat's questions. Staying silent shouldn't work on a hat that can read minds.

Interesting, what canon change would have explained Zabini's sorting?

Decent chapter, but I had a few problems with it.
Review for Chapter 2 from Voice of the Nephilim on July 14, 2009 at 07:28:42 PM
The huge, cathartic moment when Harry discovers his true heritage is skimmed over? It's not always exciting to write, but introductions like this are a little too important to just skim, I find.

Quick thinking by Flitwick. You're making him earn his House designation.

The Patils bought one owl between the two of them? I could definitely see it working, but I thought they might need their own, since they are probably going to be sorted into different houses.

I like that Voldemort has the stone. Was it Harry not being with Hagrid lead to him forgetting, since Hagrid wasn't going to Gringotts anway?

Decent, if a bit rushed.
Review for Chapter 1 from Voice of the Nephilim on July 14, 2009 at 07:21:26 PM
The canon divergence is quite minor, but I'll admit to being curious at to the paths the butterfly's ripples take.

A rather mundane start, but I'm interested enough to continue.
Review for Chapter 5 from HarryHero on March 07, 2009 at 05:45:21 AM
Hi, great story so far. I like the character development and how you are writing your alternate Harry.
Review for Chapter 5 from Ellisande on November 06, 2008 at 01:35:56 AM
I want moar. 0.o

I actually enjoyed this, thought it would be some crappy peice of shit, when I started it, but you aren't dragging anything on too much, and there a nice thing going OOH READ MORE at me.

Looking forward to the next updates.
Author reply from Seratin
Thanks, the next update should be in a week or two at most....if I figure out just exactly what the fuck I'm doing. XD
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