Review for Demon's Feign, Merlin's Pain Chapter 19 from greywizard-dumblemort on January 07, 2010

Inspired. I really enjoyed this. Goodluck with future ventures

Review for Demon's Feign, Merlin's Pain Chapter 19 from mistofshadows on January 06, 2010

Interesting, seems like a simple fire eating charm would help a lot. It's sort of hard to kill things when you're trying to kill a ghost or fragment.

Review for Demon's Feign, Merlin's Pain Chapter 19 from Lord Ravenclaw on January 06, 2010

Awesome ending, it truly turned out to be an excellent story. I rather wish that you'd write a sequel to after they returned to his world, but perhaps you'll do that as some of the episodes.

Review for Demon's Feign, Merlin's Pain Chapter 18 from greywizard-dumblemort on December 23, 2009

Epic

Review for Demon's Feign, Merlin's Pain Chapter 17 from mistofshadows on December 14, 2009

full year... doesn't sound likely you'll ever update this but hey it's interesting if a bit crazy in parts. And if you're reading this, well thanks for the story.

Review for Demon's Feign, Merlin's Pain Chapter 17 from AlanXEverfrost on June 08, 2009

Ah, just re-read this entire fic, and it is amazing. I hope you find the inspiration soon to continue writing this masterpiece.

Review for Demon's Feign, Merlin's Pain Chapter 17 from Manatheron on January 21, 2009

I have to admit, the rave reviews of DLP more or less kept me away from this story. That And I think both you, and the writer of the dresden Verse, are Playing with fire when it comes to the Denarians, but I do have to admit that you write a very compelling story. It will be quite fun to see where you take this, Keep up the excellent work.

Review for Demon's Feign, Merlin's Pain Chapter 17 from whatareyouevensaying on December 28, 2008

Brilliant update. It started a bit slow for my taste, but battles within one's mind aren't always interesting. It's very frightening to see how easily Roqa can affect Harry's perceptions of reality. Looking forward to more.

Review for Demon's Feign, Merlin's Pain Chapter 16 from whatareyouevensaying on September 08, 2008

Great story you've got going here, I dunno how I've missed it for so long. Looking forward to more.

Review for Demon's Feign, Merlin's Pain Chapter 15 from QundraDraconium on August 16, 2008

My number 1, favorite Potter/Dresden cross! I love how you feel like you are inside their heads, and how Harry's is such a distracting and confused yet powerful place to be. Great job.

Review for Demon's Feign, Merlin's Pain Chapter 14 from Lyndon Eye on April 23, 2008

Nuhuh: Wow. I absolutely love the story thus far. Despite the fact that I know absolutely nothing about Dresden-verse, this story isn’t confusing at all. You gave a lot of information about the Wardens and Dresden; that, combined with the stuff about Nevernever and the Fallen that I gleaned from Shezza’s series, made it possible to navigate through the chapters with ease. So great job with creating a successful crossover- that’s pretty impressive. As for the literary stuff: Plot: It’s moving at a pretty good pace. You’re giving every development in the plot full explication, which helps make the transitions very clear. The only confusing thing is the Gatekeeper’s time traveling plotline. I’m still not completely sure about how that works. Is it one of those time travel paradoxes in which Potter is destined to follow that path, no matter what happens (which is the way Rowling presented it)? Or can the Gatekeeper actually influence the past? Also slightly unclear is Harry’s connection to the Void. Not having read Dresden Files, I’m not entirely sure what the Void is- you can probably do more to explain it beyond jus the allusions. Characterization: Dresden is characterized really well in that he’s an extremely likeable character (even more so than Potter in this story). I think it’s the fact that he seems more human and easier to identify with than Potter. Potter’s psychological problems are immensely amusing, although admittedly distracting for the reading. But overall, the impression of Potter is that he isn’t perfect, but has generally good intentions. Murphy is also an interesting character. Initially, she seems too good to be true (i.e. physically perfect, emotionally strong, and very competent). However, I think you really balanced out her character as the story progressed, especially with her moments of weakness and flaws (such as over-aggression, etc.). Style: I really love the multiple POVs. Especially since you use them to seamlessly progress through the plot (rather than falling to a common pitfall of other authors who use multiple POVs, in which they depict the same repetitive scene from the viewpoints of the all of the characters- that gets boring really fast). I have to say that my favorite POV is still Dresden’s. While getting inside Potter’s head is interesting, I feel like his emotions and motives aren’t as explicitly presented. Also, in general, I really like the writing style. It all flows really well, and aside from the occasional grammatical error (i.e. “shooing” instead of “shooting” in the first chapter, “his” instead of “this”, etc.), it’s easy to read through. Dialogue/imagery balance is also really good. Literary elements: The drip-drop motif is awesome. It kind of reminds me of the tick-tock motif in Rushdie’s Midnight’s Children in that it appears sporadically throughout as a reminder to the reader. The doubles/pairs and foils you have throughout (i.e. Dresden/Potter, Deirdre/Murphy, Charity/Lasciel, Mai/Michael, etc.) are also really effective. Anyways, great job thus far! I hope to see a new chapter soon. -Lyndon Eye

Review for Demon's Feign, Merlin's Pain Chapter 3 from Dwitty on March 26, 2008

"I wish I'd had less blood loss, it was getting in the way of me panicking,"

Review for Demon's Feign, Merlin's Pain Chapter 10 from tmctflyboy on January 20, 2008

love the story, really look forward to the next chapter. loved the interactions between harry and the fallen angel. update soon

Review for Demon's Feign, Merlin's Pain Chapter 10 from Testament on January 07, 2008

Truly a great piece of work. Quite easy to follow even though I haven't read any Dresdenverse nor seen the show. I just hope that Harry P. remains his mostly-insane self, it gives the story that little spark that sets it apart from rest. Keep up the great work and hope you update soon.

Review for Demon's Feign, Merlin's Pain Chapter 10 from Choronzon on January 05, 2008

Excellent story. The only issue I had is it was hard to get a good image of the dresdenverse characters, because you are using both the tv show and books--and well, they are pretty different. For instance, when Murphy first appears, you begin the description with her being 5 foot even. This immediately brings to mind little blond Murphy from the books, but when you called her a brunette, I got a little bit of a mental whiplash. Other then that little issue, I really enjoyed it

Author reply
Yes, I understand that issue. Unfortunately I began the story based in tv verse with a mind to fuse books with it. So Murphy is a brunette, Morgan is black, so on so forth. I will try to describe them again and again, just so that it sticks. Still, glad you liked the story so far.

Review for Demon's Feign, Merlin's Pain Chapter 1 from Acinonyx on January 02, 2008

I really like this story, nice to see it here :)

Author reply
Thanks for the review, I should have more soon.

Review for Demon's Feign, Merlin's Pain Chapter 1 from Dark Syaoran on January 02, 2008

Where are the other chapters? Also, continue with much haste. This story is full of awesome.

Author reply
Thanks mate, I am working on it right now.