Review for Yule Time Chapter 1 from Drake999 on November 04, 2012

very touching--loved it, though i still feel the need for more! what does this reality hold?

Review for Yule Time Chapter 1 from FineBalance on January 16, 2011

Interesting idea, or at least, an old idea developed in an interesting manner. A couple of things: 1) I understood your transition from Rookwood to Voldemort, but how exactly did Dumbledore learn it? 2) Since the intention was to move beyond Voldemort, the couple of scenes in the middle could have been struck down. They don't seem to serve much purpose, but fragment the story further. I guess the central theme was about the transition of cause and effect, or something of the sort? Well, since there is no real framework in which to situate this movement, it just seems to be random scenes stitched together. 2/5

Author reply
Thanks a bunch for the feedback. So sorry to have written something you hated so. I'm toying with just pulling the story since, as you've noted, it's pretty shitty. Probably better to not clutter the site with garbage. Thanks again.