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Review for Chapter 10 from Another Douche on the internet on July 24, 2008 at 10:29:39 PM
I just read chapters 7-10, and they were pretty good. Chapter 9 was a tad bit weak, but that's to be expected from a filler chapter.

I liked the Werewolf Bill being not being passed. It was too harsh, by any standards. Richard Potter is an antagonist and at times a foolish idealist in this story. However, this time Potter was indeed correct in protesting the bill, as it would give the Aurors, and subsequently the Ministry too much power over the normal people. Too bad all that was for naught, as Voldemort betrayed the werewolves, with the aide of the Knights. I find the Knights to be an interesting concept, but I don't like the idea of this Grandmaster. Voldemort is the most terrible wizard of all time. I just don't like the idea of someone being stronger than our favorite Dark Lord. I especially despise him bowing to anyone, it makes Voldemort seem OC. Voldemort is very egotistical, I just cannot envision him bowing to anyone, no matter what.

I already hate Andromeda from the earlier chapter, now I want someone to find her and Ted, and kill them very slowly. Dumbledore giving Ted and her protection was something I liked, even Dumbledore needs to be at times vengeful, and this was the perfect opportunity.

The all wizard place was a nice idea. It gives annoyed men like Cygnus a sanctuary from annoying cu*ts. Let's just hope fangirls don't take the all wizard concept, and turn it into something else. The Christmas Ball was okay. I liked the Lucius/Narcissa parts, which surprised me. Usually I kim over parts like this, but this one was enjoyable. Giulia Zabini's appearance made me chuckle. There will indeed be scandals following the young lady soon.

The Irish/Britain war is something quite unexpected, but a good idea. While Voldemort's earlier manipulation of Fenrir and the werewolves were a tad week, this one made up for it. The man started a war between two countries, for his own goals. How do you not like this fella? I look forward to how you progress this war, and Voldemort's future plans.

Keep up the good work Methene, and update soon!

Homer
Review for Chapter 5 from Another Douche on the internet on July 24, 2008 at 10:29:05 PM
A pretty good chapter. You have managed to make me hate Andromeda enough that I want her to die in avry gruesome and painful manner. Voldemort was pretty good for the minor part he was allowed in the chapter. I want more of Voldemort, and less of Blacks and Malfoys (yes the pun was intended) at least the young ones until they actually do something, like join Voldemort.
Review for Chapter 2 from Another Douche on the internet on July 24, 2008 at 10:28:26 PM
If I might make a suggestion or two.

1. Please don't spend too much time on Hogwarts and the kids. To get a better understanding of the pureblood culture I think you should focus on the adults more than the kids.

2. Have more of Voldemort's rise to power in this fic. Not just his magical ability, but concentrate more on the way he persuades the purebloods to join him. Display his manners and perfect attitude towards the purebloods. Show how much flattery and his charm work for him.

The last part with Voldemort was my favorite of the chapter and I hope you put more emphasis on him rather than the interaction of Narcissa, Bella, Lestrange, or Lucius.
Review for Chapter 11 from romero on March 10, 2008 at 11:48:05 AM
Thanks for the great update.
Author reply from Methene
I am glad you enjoyed it. I had mixed feelings since it was the first battle I wrote, but it seems to have received positive reviews with a few worthy critiques.

Rest assured I am working as fast as my studies permit me to complete the next one.
Review for Chapter 11 from Voice of the Nephilim on March 05, 2008 at 07:59:11 PM
Well, the wait was worth it. Though sometimes that actual battle seemed to be a bit vague, overall it was well done.
Author reply from Methene
Since none of the main characters participated in the battle I showed it intentionally from a distant perspective. You can rest assured when Harry will take part the battles will become more character drive, and hopefully clearer.

Thank you for reviewing.
Review for Chapter 11 from KtheGreat on March 04, 2008 at 11:22:01 PM
This will be my review for Chapters 10 and 11. If it weren't for your review on DLP I would be asking what the reason behind Voldemort starting the war was. However, thanks to you hinting at what was to come, I must congratulate you on another brilliant manipulation by Voldemort. The scene in Chapter 10 where the Irish messenger shows up at the House of Lords was rather disappointing. The reaction of most of the Lords seemed extremely childish, and is not leaving me with much hope for most of the pureblood society. I do however agree with the way you portrayed the House's swift reaction to Ireland's outrageous demands. The biggest problem that I saw in Chapter 11 was the massive over usage of the Unforgivables. The fact that the Aurors are even using them, without some background information of why they are allowed to (Such as a clause denoting that the usage of Unforgivables during war is permitted), was rather bland. It made the entire war seem rather lackluster. It also makes the British government look like a bunch of evil imperialistic tyrants out to rule the world. I mean they are the darkest curses, and require a certain amount and potency of the correct emotions to use. That's saying a lot about who the Ministry is training as their soldiers and police. Overall though, the chapters were great additions to the story. And I'm glad to see that the plot is being furthered (Not that I didn't like the character development in previous chapters). Keep up the great work.
Author reply from Methene
The House of Lords reaction wasn't meant to come as such, I guess I need to work more on it. I might have dramatised the matter too much. I will take your words into consideration.

The use of Unforgivables will be addressed in the next chapter where we will see a new political organisation taking the spotlight. I am of course referring to the International Confederation of Wizards. I feel free to disclose this information since the next chapter will come out today.

I try to shy away from portraying anyone as outright evil, although the Ministry may seem as such now. I prefer everyone to be in shades of grey, looking out for themselves or what they believe is right.

It was my first take at a war. The idea I had expands more on international conflict than simply the same old Ministry/Dumbledore/Harry versus Lord Voldemort. I will try to improve upon my descriptions of future wars.

Thank you for the review,

Methene
Review for Chapter 4 from Heather_Sinclair on February 16, 2008 at 07:43:25 PM
As you can see I'm at Chap. 4 now and I really like this idea of yours. Certain scenes remind me of the Roman senate. I guess I watched too much Rome on HBO. But I do like the plots within plots feel that you have going.

I also like the fear or rather concern the elder Malfoy has for his son being lured by Voldemort. I almost want to yell "Don't do it Dude!." But that would be rude in civilized society.

And poor Andromeda. Is it Ted in the closet with her? I guess I'll have to continue reading to find out.

Well done so far and I'll get back to you with more.
Author reply from Methene
The transformation of the Republic into the Empire is one of my inspiration sources.

Rome was a great show, I am sad it was cancelled after the second season.

The interaction between the elders and young is also an important theme.

As for Andromeda, I am not saying:)
Review for Chapter 1 from Heather_Sinclair on February 14, 2008 at 05:17:07 PM

Chap1. Just a note to say how original I thought this story was. It's such a relief to find something new! Once I move on to the next few chapters I'll review proper.

~H
Author reply from Methene
Well I can only say I am glad you like it and hope to retain you as a reader.

Methene
Review for Chapter 9 from KtheGreat on February 13, 2008 at 08:43:21 PM
I have to agree with you about the fact that this chapter seems to calm. I can really feel that this is the calm before the storm like you said. It was interesting to see your take on Blaise's mother, Giulia. I can see how she's had seven husbands, and keeps marrying. The main thing I liked about this chapter was your portrayal of Lucius. I like the fact that he was not originally a die hard supporter of Lord Voldemort. I enjoyed how he handled the appearance of Igor, and am hoping we will see more of this in later chapters.
Author reply from Methene
Giulia was not initially planned to appear, but I saw a fanart of Mrs. Zabini and it got me thinking. The biggest problem I have right now is trying to keep everything within the original books' timeline. I try to incorporate future elements.

Giulia seemed the perfect character to do that, and I could see her sucking up to Abraxas. The man is still fairly young for a wizard, rich, powerful, the exact sort of man she would want to attract. I also wanted a scene with him at the ball, since he was going to be there.

Lucius in my mind has no motivation to join Lord Voldemort's movement. The Death Eaters ended up being similar to the Rebel Alliance, a motley assortment of Jedi, Princesses, Politicians, but also thugs and former criminals. Lucius already enjoys a privileged position, and I see him as more practical than Bellatrix, who is rather headstrong and impulsive.

Lord Voldemort is of course not going to abandon his quest of attracting Lucius. Offers will be made, events orchestrated. Having the heir of one of the most powerful families in Britain would be a huge advantage for him.

As for the calm, do not be discouraged. I needed a moment of peaceful lull, but the chaotic politics, war and misery will be coming soon.
Review for Chapter 8 from KtheGreat on February 11, 2008 at 05:42:42 PM
A closer look into pureblood society is always good in my opinion. I thought the Club a nice touch. We finally get to see the first fissure in the Black family, and Voldemort has gotten even more supporters. I'm wondering if Andromeda's pregnancy and elopement with Ted Tonks will be the pivotal point in driving her to Voldemort's crusade. And how Narcissa will react to the Black family falling apart, especially if Bella leaves. I can't wait until Chapter 9, and I hope you keep steadily updating this fic.
Author reply from Methene
I always wanted to develop the magical world more. I don't see either the Malfoys or the Blacks spending their time at the Leaky Cauldron. An exclusive location, especially one whose history is so intertwined with the history of Britain seemed like the proper place. It will of course play a role in the future as well, since everything I introduce is there for a reason.

I can't reveal more about how the Black family will fare the times, since I would be giving away the plot, but there will be events, and of course we will see Bella's and Cissy's reaction to them.

I am glad you are enjoying it and rest assured Chapter 9 is in the works.
Review for Chapter 3 from KtheGreat on February 10, 2008 at 05:49:03 PM
(Continuation of review for Chapter 7. Sorry, I posted the review inadvertently before it was finished.) I believe it was a good decision to show that Lord Potter and Lord Macmillan's decision to go against the resolution had consequences. I liked how you expanded on the Knights of Walpurgis, and am interested to see how long he can continue using them (especially since the Grandmaster seems to know exactly what Voldemort's true role is.). Voldemort has proved once again how good he is at manipulating a situation. The one thing I don't understand is how he is going to keep the truth from Fenrir. You said that the press published articles in the newspapers that said Lord Voldemort exterminated the werewolves. What's stopping him from picking up an old copy once he's recovered?
Author reply from Methene
I will respond just to this review, since the other one is also for Chapter 7.

Every single action on the political scene has more than one effect. Lords Potter and Macmillan have managed to stop the resolution, but they have lost some popular support for it. This will have effects in the future, as you may suspect.

The chapter was entitled "Betrayal" for a reason; Lord Macmillan has betrayed the Nobilitas in a sense, and since the moderates follow him like sheep the Nobilitas feels that the entire party has betrayed them. The Aliquanta have betrayed their minister who had pushed for the resolution. Lord Voldemort has betrayed both the Knights, whose role will be expanded later on, and the Werewolves. In a sense he has also betrayed his followers, and of course he has lied to the Magical world.

The Knights of Walpurgis Grandmaster knows who Voldemort is, he is yet unsure of what he is actually doing. The Knights themselves are not like the Death Eaters. They are, well I can't tell you can I. It will be made clear what they are.

Remembe
Review for Chapter 7 from KtheGreat on February 10, 2008 at 05:41:02 PM
I was slightly disappointed by the beginning of this chapter. In Chapter 6 you made it appear that Dumbledore had some subtle plan to ensure that the resolution was not passed. Besides that small disappointment I enjoyed the House of Lords scene.
Author reply from Methene
Sorry, I pushed the respond button before I finished.

As for Dumbledore, I debated whether to have him pull something out to stop the resolution, but I considered that his role as Chair would have been unsuited for that.

He is the Head of the House of Lords, but he can only turn their attention to some matters, or use procedural rules to twist them to his will. The Lords of the Realm are not school children to hang on his every word.

Still he has acted against the resolution. By declaring it as a matter of changing the organization it required 2/3 majority. It is debatable if it is indeed a change in organization, since they were temporary solutions.

We have not seen the last of Fenrir, and that is all I am saying about that :)
Review for Chapter 6 from KtheGreat on February 09, 2008 at 08:23:22 PM
I have mixed feeling about this chapter. The beginning werewolf scene was very well done, and I can't wait to see how Voldemort moves his plans forward with all the recent deaths. It was also interesting to see a new character, Domitian, introduced. However, I was disappointed with the House of Lords scene. Not because it was bad, but because you left it off with a cliffhanger. I can't wait to see how the House of Lords takes the new resolution, and what Dumbledore plans to do to stop it.
Author reply from Methene
Lord Voldemort is the Manipulator in this chapter. He uses what he can for his benefit. The Werewolf attack has more implication then a mere assassination. All will be revealed, in due time of course...

The new character I was a bit nervous about. The scene seemed a bit stretched for my tastes, but I needed to introduce him for he will play a role in the future. I am not going to say what and how, of course, but hints have been given for him since the first chapters.

I am sorry for leaving you with a cliffhanger, since it was not my intention. I am a great fan of order and symmetry and if I included the House of Lords debate the chapter would have stood at over 7,000 words, breaking my 5,000 words average. Rest assured, the scene is already written, and will be the first thing you will see in chapter 6.

I am glad to see you are interested in the story.
Review for Chapter 5 from KtheGreat on February 09, 2008 at 07:22:36 PM
Another great addition to the story. I was happy with the way that you had Bellatrix handle the situation with Andromeda. You showed that Bellatrix didn't start off as a raving lunatic, she was just headstrong. The end of the scene between Narcissa and Bellatrix has now gotten me very interested in this story. Especially with Bellatrix's obvious leaning towards joining Voldemort. I am interested to see what happens when Narcissa sees Andromeda eloping with Ted and Bellatrix running off to Voldemort.
Author reply from Methene
I am glad you enjoyed the scene. I certainly enjoyed writing my version of the Black sister interaction. In my story, Lord Voldemort at this stage is gathering his forces, he has studied the Pureblood society and knows which levers to use to attract followers.

Bellatrix is certainly headstrong, as are most Blacks, but her raving lunacy, in my opinion comes from Azkaban. I can understand how 14 years in a damp, Dementor infested prison can turn even a monk into a raving lunatic.

We have not seen the end of the Black sisters and their relation to Lord Voldemort...
Review for Chapter 4 from KtheGreat on January 28, 2008 at 11:56:27 AM
An interesting cliffhanger. I was surprised to find that I really enjoyed this story. It was very refreshing to read a well done nonHarry-centric story. I love your characterization of Abraxus and Cygnus. I'm interested in when Abraxus will inform Lucius about his desire for him to join the House of Commons after Hogwarts, and who Lord Voldemort will contact next. Going a little off-topic, I was wondering how long each of these books is going to be?
Author reply from Methene
I am glad you enjoyed it. It is true the popularity of non-Harry centric stories is less than I would like, but one must do with one has.

I wanted to create an environment where a properly backbone Harry could shine, and I need two introductory stories to tell the tale. I was aiming at having them around 100,000 words. I have a clear template for each of them so far, and I have appreciated them at around 20 chapters each.
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