Review for Potter Place 3 scene contest entries Chapter 3 from aduroconglacio on April 24, 2008

I'm going to have to be harsh here, for the sake of the rest of this community. Don't take it too personally. I'll give you 1, maybe 2 points out of 10 for having the ability to write coherent English. That's it. Notice how this website is called the "Last Bastion of Quality Harry Potter Fanfiction." I'm going to place emphasis on the word "Quality." Have you looked at the other stories on this site? Look at the updated fictions - your stories pale in comparison to theirs. Try not to post stuff like this until you've relieved yourself of your squeeing fangirl mindset. Your work (and I mean all your work posted on this site) thus far is plotless, emotionally-shallow, and has no stimulating and/or meaningful dialogue of any sort. Just cliche after cliche, and cheesy, unrealistic declarations of unfounded romance. Learn to *write*, instead of just writing in the normal sense. Please. For the sake of everyone else.