Review for A Different Path: The Sorcerer's Stone Chapter 7 from silverlasso on June 18, 2008

This story is great...I'm definitely going to be following each track all the way through (though at the moment I'm liking Hufflepuff!Harry). Props, though, because this must require an INSANE amount of planning and charting out. I can't wait for the update; not only are you writing in a very readable style, but the quality of your writing and plot in general is wonderful.

Review for A Different Path: The Sorcerer's Stone Chapter 7 from Jeram on June 15, 2008

I'm going to put my complete review in here: I think you are proceeding quite well so far, but I had a few specific comments: "Somehow, Harry ended up at Kings Cross with a ticket to Platform Nine and Three Quarters, a wand, a snowy owl, and absolutely no idea how to get on the train to his new school, Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardy. -Hagrid had forgotten to tell him.: Careful with that punctuation - you have an extra period in there after Wizardry (which is also spelled incorrectly). "A boy named Fred, -no George -no really Fred, went next and then his twin, George. They had both ran quickly to the same place as Percy, but had disappeared within the blink of an eye. Perhaps a magical device or trapdoor transported them to the correct Platform?" I don't really like how you use dashes in your story - it seems like you aren't using them correctly (which is to symbolize a pause or break in a sentence, a bit like a semicolon), and here specifically the Fred-George-Fred-George bit just reads as a big blurgh, and the humor falls flat. "and perhaps, just perhaps, if this snake would talk with him and call him amigo" Whoa... extremely sappy, and kind of weird. "Call him amigo"? I'm not sure I like that. "(Had he turned he would've seen a sneering Potions Professor, a disappointed Headmaster, and beaming Head of Hufflepuff.)" I see you repeat things sometimes - which I guess is all right. Although why didn't you mention Sprout's name here like you did with Flitwick? "She really shouldn't leave him; she had seen the way he had looked at the Weasleys, but it was impertinent that Blaise join them and effectively bond with Harry and her on their first train ride to Hogwarts." Uh, I think you meant "imperative", not "impertinent". Not really the same meaning. Good luck, -J

Review for A Different Path: The Sorcerer's Stone Chapter 6 from Memory King on June 13, 2008

Guess I'll have to wait for quite a while. Still keeping me entertained, for the time being at least. Looking forward to more!

Review for A Different Path: The Sorcerer's Stone Chapter 4 from Jeram on June 08, 2008

Hmm, this seems like an incredibly difficult undertaking, but I wish you all the luck in achieving this impossible goal. So far, it's not bad - the little twist with Daphne was a welcome change from where I thought you were going. But still, lines like these: "And your children will be second generation Pureblood if you marry right," she averted her eyes than and a light blush was on her cheeks. A heavier one painted Harry's cheeks. Harry blushed, suddenly modest for Daphne, though her nightgown barely showed outlines of her training bra. "It is a wonder...what a pretty face and a compulsion charm can do to a mere boy." Really? How old is Harry supposed to be anyway? You really think he'd be influenced by such things so young? Well, in any event, it's a interesting effort that I'll be keeping an eye on. -J

Author reply
Thanks...and now that I have reread it, it does sound a bit odd. I think I was getting ahead of myself while typing and daydreaming about the future chapters of this fic.

Review for A Different Path: The Sorcerer's Stone Chapter 4 from Memory King on June 07, 2008

Interesting, has Voldemort returned early in this universe, or are we talking about a different lord? This story is growing on me, will certainly keep a sharp eye out for future updates.

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It's Voldemort, but he hasn't fully returned yet. Thanks for pointing out the Dive/Drive mistake and for your reviews! Sincerely, Dishonorable

Review for A Different Path: The Sorcerer's Stone Chapter 1 from Memory King on June 07, 2008

Not yet sure if you can pull this off in the fanfiction format, an interesting attempt for sure, however. Pretty sure HP only stayed with his relatives for 10 years. You also called the Dursley residence Privet Dive instead of Drive. Spell checkers don't catch those sort of errors, you'll just have to read your stuff more critically in the future, or get a beta. I'm done with the nitpicking, onto the next chapter I guess. Keep going!

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Thanks for the nitpicking, and sorry about the 'N's in my other reply. (Didn't look carefully before hitting Enter.) Sincerely, Dishonorable