Review for What is Wrong With Me. Chapter 6 from Seratin on March 28, 2011

I'd never reccomend that you should stop writing, but this story does indeed suck. It's more the subject matter than anything to be honest. Original character named after the author? This seems like a self insert.As a rule of thumb, people don't usually like reading about an author inserting himself/herself into their own fantasy (Twilight is the exception, people lap that shit up) it ruins their immersion into the story.

Author reply
Thnx for your opinion. ^_^ its not really a self insert... I just like the name. ( i am not very creative with them, and i rarely find one i like) Her name was originally Mireille, but i came to hate it after a while. Also, her personality has nothing to do with my own... To be clear, if its not too much trouble of course, you just hate her personality? or you dont like it because you perceive the author in the story? Hope it isnt to much trouble, but may I ask if Snape is kept more or less on character? or did I fail horribly in that part too? Again, thnx for ur opinion, hope it helps me improve my writing XD.